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Storybook: Tales of Tails and Talas


(Hanuman Chasing the Sun - image credit)


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  1. Hey Chris! Wow, ok. Your website looks AMAZING. It looks like you have spent a considerable amount of time working on it and making sure it flows as well as possible. I am really glad that you have also linked some YouTube videos on your site, as well. I think the additional study will really help orient your viewers towards the theme you are going for with your storybook. Your first story is so cool! Also, did you do that math for the distance traveled your self? If so, props! Either way I think that is a really interesting fun-fact because it explains that people came to scientific confusions on their own and are now backed up by modern day science. Overall, I think you have done a great job so far and I look forward to seeing how your storybook grows!

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  2. Chris, your Storybook is so impressive and I think you need to give us all a lesson on how to make our websites as pleasing as yours! In addition, it is super easy to navigate and the content is excellent. Hanuman is also one of the main focuses in my Storybook, so I am excited to see how our stories compare and contrast, as we talk about the same character throughout. The tunes that you linked in both of the Youtube videos at the bottom of your introduction mend nicely with your goals, and I think they will help you as you progress with each post. I went ahead and read through "Chasing the Sun" and think you did a great job choosing appropriate verbiage and tone. I am so impressed by the detail you have managed to cover in one story, without completely overwhelming my brain. Keep up the good work.

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  3. Hi Chris! I really enjoyed reading the introduction and first story in your storybook, I can't wait to follow your stories throughout the rest of the semester. You made your website very easy to navigate from your Home page and that is always greatly appreciated for someone like me who is not great with technology. I think you can make parts of your introduction flow a little better. First, you do not need to say 'rhythm' or 'pitch' twice in your sentence "...we can interpret differences in rhythm (long vs. short rhythms) and pitch (high vs. low) pitch..." Also, I think your sentence "... if a vocalist were to have a relatively long held note on a relatively high pitch..." could be revised to "...if a vocalist were to hold a relatively long note on a relatively high pitch..." This is just a place that I had to read back twice in order to understand completely, and I think it would make for a better flow. I read your first story "Chasing the Sun" and really enjoyed the theme and details that you managed to include in such a short story. Your attention to detail definitely enriched your story and I am looking forward to reading more of your stories soon!

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  4. Hello Chris, I really liked your first story and the introduction. You did a great job making the Introduction a strong intro, which introduced your character well. In your first story, you mentioned the relationship between the story and the calculations with NASA. This is a very interesting detail, that is crazy to think about. Maybe there are other similarities you can find in other stories. This would be a great connection to build in your portfolio. There are many directions you can take your site, this is just an idea. This will create a sense of connection between all your stories, thus allowing you to have a complete profile. This is just something to think about. I also used a Youtube video in my story to show a visual display of the story for the audience. I am glad I am not the only one that thought of this idea. Overall I enjoyed the story and your talented and detail-oriented story writing. Job well done.

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  5. Hi Chris!
    The amount of detail you include in your Storybook is astounding! The various resources that you include along with the music videos makes this a very informative Storybook. I love this childlike version of Hanuman that you portray and the story is quite entertaining as well. I would love to see some more physical descriptions of child Hanuman just because I think it would add a nice touch of detail to know what our main character looks like. In your Author's Note, it would also be helpful to include more information about what the original story is like and how it goes because I was fairly lost as to what happens in the original, having not read it myself and so it made it difficult to see the connection between the two. You did an excellent, in-depth job on this Storybook overall though and I can tell you put forth a lot of effort. Great work!

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  6. Hi Chris! I read your introduction earlier and was so excited to see that you have officially uploaded your first story to your storybook website! You transition into the story "Chasing the Sun" very well and your paragraphs flow very well with one another throughout the story. The only thing that I would change in the first paragraph is in the sentence "Anjana's curse would be lifted as once her son achieved great renown." I think it would make more sense if you said "... as soon as her son achieved..." The section of your story that discussed Hanuman's descent back to the ground introduced Indra's role in Hanuman's story well. In your paragraph that explained the ways that the god's attempted to make amends with Hanuman and his father, you stated that he was granted the "ability to change form at will" two times. I would suggest removing one of those. I think it is really cool that you included a musical interpretation with the story that you told -- you provide components to understand the stories you tell at different angles very well. Also, I like that you don't focus on the physical description of Hanuman as a child too much, it allows the reader to use their imagination a little bit! Great work, I can't wait to read more!

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  7. Chris, great job on your website and overall presentation of the story . I picked the same story for my first and I love your way of presenting it. Thanks for including a sanskrit shloka and the two different interpretation for it. Looks like you did extensive research for the story. I'll be looking forward to read more from you!

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  8. Hey chris! Great job on your project! I just finished reading the introduction and your first story. I was very impressed by how you organized and designed your layout! I also like how you provide the musical interpretations, links, and texts. Hanuman is a great character to center your project on! He was actually one of my favorite from the readings of the Ramayana. You could tell you put a lot of time in the details, writing, and design of your project! Your story was just as impressive ! I really enjoy the detail that you include in your writing and dialogue! It was also cool that you added the explanation of calculated distance of travel that Hanuman jumped! I will be sure to come back and read more of your renditions of Hanumans tales! Have a great week!

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